First Draft Initial Feedback

After sending our first draft of 'Eighteen' for review and feedback, we received the following comments on which to improve;

Improvements	Action taken
smoke productions	we will create a new production company title and remove smoke productions from the trailer
awards screen goes on too long	We shortened the frame so it lasts only 3 seconds rather than the original 5
2nd critic quote isn't on long enough to read	We lengthened the 2nd critic quote to make it long enough to read
cut out writing '2 me'	We removed the clip of the actress writing ‘2 me’ on the mirror in the bathroom scene
titles - don't give away enough of the narrative	We will discuss the narrative and choose fitting titles which allow the narrative to be briefly outlines yet still enigmatic